Blog #10

To revise my proposal draft first I plan to meet the word count. I have only about 1,700 words and I need to have a minimum of 2,000 words. To reach this minimum I am going to include what the parents will be learning in there classes and they can apply to their life. I will also be making my proposal more positive instead of something forceful by the government. I also need to include all nine of my sources instead of only seven. I will also be erasing some information that is irrelevant to my essay.